Dear Tony, Thank you for your useful site. However i am confused. In various sites i have read that it is necessary to mention trends also. So overall paragraph should include 1. the highest , the lowest 2. trends – increasing, decreasing. So my introduction would be like: Overall, both UK and Australia were the most popular countries for V students for study while US was the least popular thought the whole period. In addition, there was an obvious growth in number of students in all countries over this twelve-year period OR all countries experienced a growth in student numbers… Read more »
Hi Tatiana For a clear overview, I mention the trends and the largest / highest. Sometimes I mention the lowest, but it depends on the question. It would definitely be ok to mention the fact that numbers to the US peaked. With regard to your overview, there are some problems > you missed the articles from the US and the UK. You can’t get an 8 for GRA if you have “systematic” errors, and missing articles would definitely count as systematic. > for study is wrong. To study is better, but it can be omitted > growth is non-countable, so… Read more »
HI Tony,
Thank you very much for your valuable comments! I will work on my grammar !
Kind regards,
Tatiana
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8 years ago
Dear Tony,
I got my required band. Overall 7.5. My weakest point was writing and I followed initially Liz and then got address of your website from her. I think your way of teaching writing is exceptional, simple yet very effective. I got 7.5 in writing. Could not believe I did that. I m thankful to you.
Could you please explain why the explanation has ended in “past perfect tense”, why not continued in simple past tense?
if it was in the latter tense,is it wrong?
Can it be mentioned in introduction that “the comparison is done every alterante year over a-12 year-period,from 2000 to 2012.”
thanks
introduction:
the given bar chart illustrates the distribution of students from Vietnam in different countries,namely the UK,the US & Australia.Their numbers are depicted in 1000s & the analysis is done every altenate year, spanning from 2000 to 2012.
Could you please go through this?
The first sentence is ok, and the second is not really necessary. Also, depict is really used for art, rather than Task 1.
Tony
doc
8 years ago
Dear tony can you please comment on the essay The bar chart illustrates the total number of students from Vietnam who studied in three different countries, US, Australia and the UK over a period of 12 years from 200 to 2012 Overall, the numbers of Vietnamese students studying in the UK and Australia increased in the given period, whereas for the US it fluctuated. In the start of period, around 10,000 students from Vietnam studied both in United States and Australia, while just under 5000 students opted for America. The trend of Vietnamese students going abroad to the the UK… Read more »
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Dear Tony, Thank you for your useful site. However i am confused. In various sites i have read that it is necessary to mention trends also. So overall paragraph should include 1. the highest , the lowest 2. trends – increasing, decreasing. So my introduction would be like: Overall, both UK and Australia were the most popular countries for V students for study while US was the least popular thought the whole period. In addition, there was an obvious growth in number of students in all countries over this twelve-year period OR all countries experienced a growth in student numbers… Read more »
Hi Tatiana For a clear overview, I mention the trends and the largest / highest. Sometimes I mention the lowest, but it depends on the question. It would definitely be ok to mention the fact that numbers to the US peaked. With regard to your overview, there are some problems > you missed the articles from the US and the UK. You can’t get an 8 for GRA if you have “systematic” errors, and missing articles would definitely count as systematic. > for study is wrong. To study is better, but it can be omitted > growth is non-countable, so… Read more »
HI Tony,
Thank you very much for your valuable comments! I will work on my grammar !
Kind regards,
Tatiana
Dear Tony,
I got my required band. Overall 7.5. My weakest point was writing and I followed initially Liz and then got address of your website from her. I think your way of teaching writing is exceptional, simple yet very effective. I got 7.5 in writing. Could not believe I did that. I m thankful to you.
Hi Doc
Thanks for your comments, and congratulations on your great score
Tony
Could you please explain why the explanation has ended in “past perfect tense”, why not continued in simple past tense?
if it was in the latter tense,is it wrong?
Can it be mentioned in introduction that “the comparison is done every alterante year over a-12 year-period,from 2000 to 2012.”
thanks
By plus time period plus past perfect – correct English
very informative ……thank you
is the word ‘distribution’ correct instead of ‘popularity’?
Distribution might be ok. I’d have to see the sentence
introduction:
the given bar chart illustrates the distribution of students from Vietnam in different countries,namely the UK,the US & Australia.Their numbers are depicted in 1000s & the analysis is done every altenate year, spanning from 2000 to 2012.
Could you please go through this?
Hi Mia
The first sentence is ok, and the second is not really necessary. Also, depict is really used for art, rather than Task 1.
Tony
Dear tony can you please comment on the essay The bar chart illustrates the total number of students from Vietnam who studied in three different countries, US, Australia and the UK over a period of 12 years from 200 to 2012 Overall, the numbers of Vietnamese students studying in the UK and Australia increased in the given period, whereas for the US it fluctuated. In the start of period, around 10,000 students from Vietnam studied both in United States and Australia, while just under 5000 students opted for America. The trend of Vietnamese students going abroad to the the UK… Read more »
Hi Khan
Good answer. Just be careful with your punctuation – the “while” in the final paragraph should be a new sentence.
Tony
Thanku tony
You’re welcome